My elder sister phoned me on the morning, at 7.30 am. She (Ml) has already arrived at Immigration Office of Banda Aceh. She was waiting for me there. Then I got there soon. I was accompanied her untill she finished the passport process.
Then, I and she were went to Gampong Reuleh, Aceh Besar. About 20 minutes from Banda Aceh. We met our elder sister there. She (Fr) has lived with her husband and children.
After that, before noon, we came to our niece house at Pagar Air, a village which near to welcome gate of Banda Aceh City. We picked a couple child of our niece (Mn & Sq). I got surprise by a call from Jakarta number before we departed. A secret call. :D
Then we went to Bathoh to ate lunch in Saung Bambu Trisa. It was a traditional restaurant with 'Nasi Bakar Spesial Trisa' as a special menu.
One hour later, I was got my office. I and a team has discussed about a book projcet we have to do as soon as.
On the afternoon, I met my college friend at a coffee shop, Sada Coffee in Gampong Mulia. He (Zh) was working the thesis an I assisted him. We were had spending time till two hours.
Then, I came to my elder brother (Mj) before finish the day with visited our family too in the Zainal Abidin Hospital.
I was so tired, but I was absolutly happy. :D
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Tuesday, 24/03/14, 11.45 pm.
Then, I and she were went to Gampong Reuleh, Aceh Besar. About 20 minutes from Banda Aceh. We met our elder sister there. She (Fr) has lived with her husband and children.
After that, before noon, we came to our niece house at Pagar Air, a village which near to welcome gate of Banda Aceh City. We picked a couple child of our niece (Mn & Sq). I got surprise by a call from Jakarta number before we departed. A secret call. :D
Then we went to Bathoh to ate lunch in Saung Bambu Trisa. It was a traditional restaurant with 'Nasi Bakar Spesial Trisa' as a special menu.
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| Saung Bambu Trisa Menu. 'Nasi Bakar Special' was on the top-right. |
On the afternoon, I met my college friend at a coffee shop, Sada Coffee in Gampong Mulia. He (Zh) was working the thesis an I assisted him. We were had spending time till two hours.
Then, I came to my elder brother (Mj) before finish the day with visited our family too in the Zainal Abidin Hospital.
I was so tired, but I was absolutly happy. :D
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Tuesday, 24/03/14, 11.45 pm.
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Dear Makmur,
1. "Phoned" isn't a verb. You can replace it with "called"
2. "I and she" -> "we"
3."We met our elder sister there" -> you can say it with "the eldest" if she's the first child of your family. Or with "we met our second sister". It will be less confusing for us
4. Try to figure out the differences between in, on, at.
5. "couple child" -> children
6. "I was got my office" -> arrived
7. "We were had spending time till two hours." -> not a proper sentence. You can change it to "we were together for 2 hours"
8. "before" / "after" are usually followed by "-ing"
9. "projcet we have to do as soon as" -> as soon as what? as possible? or you can write "at the soonest"
10. "He (Zh) was working the thesis an I assisted him" -> maksudnya?
Please revise this post, okay ;)
Good job by the way.
Hi Ms. Cut Isyana.
My thanks for your review. I got new knowledge. :D
Oh ya, before I revised it, there are two things I have to tell you.
No. 9 : I see. I mean that it was "as soon as possible". :D
No. 10 : I forgot to put the last alphabet on word "an". That was I mean: "He (Zh) was working the thesis and I assisted him."
So, what is the correct sentence? :D
Thank you.
Ah I see.. you can say "he was working on the thesis and I assisted him." :)
Heum.. Oke.
But let me know, why that is must be used "on" after "working"? :D
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